bgbg3721 发表于 2023-9-5 14:54   全显示 1楼
虽说原作并无云凌雪皇宫行刺的剧情，不过同人从此切入还是很有想法的，也容易展开肉戏。只是这篇同人写得简单了点，按说云凌雪是本文的主角，应当重点铺设一下这个场景的剧情再写肉戏的，而且这一节的肉戏稍显平淡。作者既然能想到云凌雪是初开后庭，可见是认真阅读过原作的，云凌雪此前确实未与杨傲天有过后庭之欢，所以同人完全可以考虑在这里详写，再加一些云凌雪的心理感受做文章。
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